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Your Eyes

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December 12, 2003
Your Eyes by +pachunka "tis a Shakespearean sonnet," the poet says in his comments. Pachunka explains what that means but reading this poem causes one to forget "form" as sound sinks the reader into meaning.
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The Earth and all her jubilee and might,
 and self-inflicted hardship overcome,
 and doctrine forged to settle wrong and right
no more can tell her doctors from the Sun-

with science and scripture stirred and made the same,
 and idols cast from dirt and lust and gold,
 and sunlight ploughed and passed a clever name,
 and beauty culled and bought and used and sold,

thus, sun and beauty bound and in a mew,
 as each one treads your lashes and your hair,
but glossy doctrines cast and mould and skew;
 and you can't tell the sunlight from the glare-

  and don the golden makeup and disguise,
  as lashes keep the sunlight from your eyes.
Some morning sunlight, a special somebody, and a pissy world inspired this.

'tis a Shakespearean sonnet-- for those who don't know, to achieve the maximum possible showing off, the form involves 14 lines of iambic pentameter (10 syllables per line, even syllables stressed, odd unstressed), three verses dealing with the main theme in slightly different ways (I'm actually not 100% sure how strict that is), and a summarylike rhyming couplet. ababcdcdefefgg rhyme scheme. And it shouldn't be spaced out like it is here.. but I think it makes it easier on the eyes, and much as I love the form, 'tis but a form.

Tell me what you'd do with this.

I'm most pleased. :)

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